This writing will be able 3 major experiences I have gone through in my life and how these experiences changed me as a person and gave me a better outlook of what I want to do in the future. I also will be speaking about experiences that expose my powers and experiences that has given me knowledge and taught me something. These experiences are very important to me because each meant something to me in my life.
One experience that gave me an insight on what I want to do is when I had the opportunity to work in 3 different hospitals for the past 3 years. I worked at Dana Farber Cancer Institute in the summer of 2013 as a receptionist in the Breast Oncology Department. I learned a lot of office work and how to create many projects using excel and PowerPoint. In the fall of 2013-2014, I worked at Brigham and Women's Hospital in the Pulmonary Department and was basically my supervisors assistant. I also did office work and create my own booklet about Asthma. This past coming summer I worked at Children's Hospital and I was in the Supply Chain Department where all the inventory was for the whole hospital and I learned each of the supply and threw away any expired supplies. This has taught me that I want to be involved in the Medical Field as I grow older and I want to do this for a livings
Second experience in my life that exposed my power was working at a program called Sociedad Latina. This organization has taught me so much. They knew I was afraid of public speaking so they challenged me to create a testimony and to present it out to the Boston school committee on national television and thousands of people surrounding me. I almost pissed my pants! I am very well in communicating but I never had the urge to speak in front of many people and being able to experience that did terrify me but I definitely got through with it and gained so much confidence with public speaking. I am still a bit shy however, I have more guts to do it now.
Last but not least, the third experience in my life that has given me knowledge is when I went to field trip freshmen year to the Holocaust in downtown for history class. The holocaust was created when Hitler was in charge of Germany. 11 million people were killed by the Nazis and 6 million of them were Jews. It was a terrible thing they did to people and everyone just tried to forget about it but can you really forget something like this? having the opportunity to see this In person and learn more about it gave me so much knowledge.
Worst Job
Cleaning and sweeping
Bus tables'
set tables
didn't have a meaning
to what I was doing
I was a busboy
got paid so little
doing too much
was feeling belittled
treated unfairly
the color of my skin
I could do more then just wash a freakin' dish
held up my chin
full of pride
although I sometimes cried
Stuck it through for my mom
she needed the money
I tried to just keep it calm
I was just a busboy anyway
the worse freakin' job
I just went through it anyway
Kim,
ReplyDeleteGood stories. I almost spit my water out when I read the piss your pants line. That stuck out! You did a great job of identifying two work-related themes in your life. You must be a career-driven person if two of the most impactful moments were about great work experiences.
Your stories are quick and written with an urgency. Try to slow it down just a bit and take your time to come to your realization. That's what seems to be missing from your stories - the final moments of realization. You don't describe how the experience made a greater impact. You may mention, in the final sentence. I'd like to see several sentences, if not a small paragraph, dedicated to the explanation of the impact. The paragraphs here seem to end too abruptly. Almost before you really teach the reader your lesson.
You've selected good images for your post. Try to space them out in a pattern to create a more paternalistic design. The two images, placed right on top of each other and not separated by text, seem to be randomly placed.
Your poem is ok - I think that it needs to have more going on. It needs to be a little longer and the flow needs to be tighter. See if you can read this over a beat. Some of the rhyme patterns are confusing. Try to tighten that up next time by reading to a beat or a song. Something with a steady drum.
Overall, nice work. I think your consistency is impressive. Let's try to up our next poem by letting it flow into something a little deeper.
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